The pengy life (BOOK 1 CHAP 3)

ceryt56 · Subject: The pengy life (BOOK 1 CHAP 3) Sat Sep 20, 2008 12:25 am

Chap. 1

One morning, A penguin see a shine sun and say "ahhh A good morning" Then he took his puffle for a walk. Later, He danced at the Night club and found a DJ guy being alone playing. He said "Welcome to the night club!" Penguin say "Thanks for the warm welcome." DJ say "Your welcome." Then 2 hour laters... He was so tired,Hungry and drinky. He went over a coffee shop and order a hot chocolate coffee but a waiter said "We are out of coffee. Please come again soon." Then the penguin say "Uggh i am do drinky and want coffee!"

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[justify]For 6 min, A coffee truck arrived and The penguin yelled "HOURRY!!" then he got coffee. Then he went to get pizza and the cheif are saying that the penguin order a chicken and the waiter said "sorry but penguin don't eat chicken. This is a pizza shop!" Then the penguin said "OH! Can i have a warm pizza?" Then the waiter said "Ok" then after 2 minutes, The pizza was ready and the penguin eat so fast like 10 sec! :O Then the penguin got to full and he always fell so he need to go to the gym to lose weight..

Chap. 3

[justify]He went to a penguin igloo which is a gym and like 10 penguin doing the push-up so the coach said "looks like you need to get so loose weight so" the penguin said "sign me up!" Then the coach said "Ok.*signs person up* Now go do push-ups" then he did like 100,000. He loosed all of his weight in 8 hours! :O. Then he like feeding his puffle but when he went to his igloo, His puffle wasn't there so he cryed.

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Matty Matt · Subject: Re: The pengy life (BOOK 1 CHAP 3) Sat Sep 27, 2008 5:51 pm

I do not like it that much
5/10

giatekla · Subject: Re: The pengy life (BOOK 1 CHAP 3) Mon Oct 20, 2008 1:55 pm

Try improving your grammar and removing the tags.
Also, try improving the plot and basing the story on the title.

So far, it's ok. :D

giatekla

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